Death will take

Best Gore Forums Chill Out Zone Poetry Death will take

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    • #68027
      Death overdue
      Participant

      Behold the sunder
      The veil has lifted
      Exposing power
      Reaping vengeance

      Violent, the will to destroy
      Fire, raping life devoid

      Drawing nigh, the architect
      Render the fray
      Rembrandt Painting hell
      Chaos create

      All hail the masterpiece
      Cower before it’s majesty

      The vile beckons
      Ensuing fate
      The final solace
      Death will take

      In silence whispered
      And crying havoc
      A bloody cistern
      In raving madness

      Hatred, the fatal divide
      Violence, eroding life

      The fallen wither
      Ashen wind’s breadth
      In burning embers
      Bodies of the dead

      The veil has lifted
      The vile beckons

      Eternal darkness
      The last embrace
      The final solace
      Death will take

    • #68029

      The vile beckons,
      Ensuing fate,
      The final seconds,
      Death will take,

      Behold the sunder,
      The veil has lifted,
      Exposing power,
      And reaping vengeance,
      Violent will to destroy,
      Fire raping life devoid,
      Drawing nigh the architect,
      Render the fray Rembrandt,
      Painting hell chaos create,
      All hail the masterpiece,
      Cower before it’s majesty,

      The vile beckons,
      Ensuing fate,
      The final seconds,
      Death will take,

      Oh in silence whispered,
      And crying havoc,
      A bloody cistern,
      In raving madness,
      Hatred fatal devide,
      Violence eroding life,
      The fallen wither,
      Ashen winds breadth,
      In burning embers,
      Bodies of the dead,

      The veil has lifted,

      The vile beckons,
      Ensuing fate,
      The final seconds,
      Death will take,

      Eternal darkness,
      The last embrace,
      The final solace death will take…

      • #68032
        Death overdue
        Participant

        Nah, goes against the flow and rhythm. The final moments before death the spirit calms as the agnal breathing begins. Thus, the final solace. The seconds are invalid. For the very moment before death can be an eternity to the dying soul.

    • #68262

      I threw in seconds to rhyme with beckons.
      I hoped it would make the hook sound better.
      And I was going for rhythm and flow.
      Either way I enjoyed your poem.
      I myself am also a poet.
      🙂

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